Post by VIERLYN on Apr 28, 2011 22:07:23 GMT -5
Hello, welcome to BMR (again!),
There are a few little things we would like to have edited if you don't mind.
First, could you elaborate more on his personality? After some discussion, we think it's a bit on the short side. If you'd like some ideas or suggestions, what helps make him a good priest? How does he show his compassion to people? What makes him so considerate and fatherly?
Considering your play by is Hugh, we don't have an issue with that. It's the limp you mentioned. We feel that it gives off a very big "House MD" vibe.
The other little thing was about the history of Mr. Benedict. How did he meet Gwen? Also, a lot of your characters seem to know/have had some sort of relationship with Gwen. I don't want this to sound like an attack or anything, but is it possible that he could be seperate from that? If you would not like to do that, then please fill in some more information on how he met her/his experiences.
Also, you mentioned he is a priest. Did he turn to religion before or after being a hunter? Or is he a hunter with really deep faith? How did he get into the field of hunting. Is Benard a retired hunter and more of a priest now? Or visa versa?
If you could make these changes and inform us when they are made we will look at this application again!
Thank you!
There are a few little things we would like to have edited if you don't mind.
First, could you elaborate more on his personality? After some discussion, we think it's a bit on the short side. If you'd like some ideas or suggestions, what helps make him a good priest? How does he show his compassion to people? What makes him so considerate and fatherly?
Considering your play by is Hugh, we don't have an issue with that. It's the limp you mentioned. We feel that it gives off a very big "House MD" vibe.
The other little thing was about the history of Mr. Benedict. How did he meet Gwen? Also, a lot of your characters seem to know/have had some sort of relationship with Gwen. I don't want this to sound like an attack or anything, but is it possible that he could be seperate from that? If you would not like to do that, then please fill in some more information on how he met her/his experiences.
Also, you mentioned he is a priest. Did he turn to religion before or after being a hunter? Or is he a hunter with really deep faith? How did he get into the field of hunting. Is Benard a retired hunter and more of a priest now? Or visa versa?
If you could make these changes and inform us when they are made we will look at this application again!
Thank you!
